I like your plan for how these floating pieces depicting the evenings events will fit together. I think some of it works well and some of it is clutter and weirdly composed/cropped. Your guy also might transform into a boneless dwarf sometimes too. I think the narrative is sort of unclear. I feel like the guy goes out to get some new duds (i like the iphone googlemap thing) and then meets his gal at a restaurant. I think it spends a little too much time on preparation for the evening and not enough time on the clothes. Some of the fun tiny rushing bits are working really well though.